[Serious] Sonnets

[k1ll3rdr4g0n]

Ok so I have to write a sonnet for creative writing
It has to match the rhyme scheme:
ABAB|CDCD|EFEF|GG

I have this so far...

In a hot summers night
she was as beatiful as that day
with all his might
that one day in may

Basically I just need help writing the rest of this poem with that rhyme scheme .

[MartinLiss]

A sonnet is usually written in iambic pentameter (every other word emphasized, 5 beats per line) and unfortunately what you have written so far is neither of those.

[MartinLiss]

Here is an example.

Joy

Oh when I held you in my arms that night
and kissed your mouth and held your perfect breast,
I felt pure joy and absolute delight
that I could be so very truly blessed.

For what in life is stronger than the need
to touch with love and to be touched in kind:
to open up ourselves and to concede
the borders of our self, our heart and mind?

Now these poor words are my attempt to show
the feelings that your touch has given me:
the joy in me like one I hope to know:
the joy that I once thought could never be.

And where from here we’ll go I can’t be sure,
but it’s my fondest wish that it endure.

[k1ll3rdr4g0n]

I know, my teacher thinks its to tough to write it in iambic pentameter so I just have to follow that rhyme scheme.

I think I'ma steal some words from your poem if you don't mind .

[MartinLiss]

I know, my teacher thinks its to tough to write it in iambic pentameter so I just have to follow that rhyme scheme.

I think I'ma steal some words from your poem if you don't mind .

I don't mind at all. Iambic pentameter isn't that hard and if you are stuck for a rhyme here's one place you can go.

[Jacob Roman]

Oh when I held you in my arms that night
and kissed your mouth and held your perfect breast,
I felt pure joy and absolute delight
that I could be so very truly blessed.

You should be banned for being a potty mouth.

[MartinLiss]

And you for covering up the Venus De Milo.

[penagate]

And you for covering up the Venus De Milo.

[mendhak]

And you for covering up the Venus De Milo.

Touche



Cigarettes

No smoke without you, my fire.
After you left,
your cigarette glowed on in my ashtray
and sent up a long thread of such quiet grey
I smiled to wonder who would believe its signal
of so much love. One cigarette
in the non-smoker's tray.
As the last spire
trembles up, a sudden draught
blows it winding into my face.
Is it smell, is it taste?
You are here again, and I am drunk on your tobacco lips.
Out with the light.
Let the smoke lie back in the dark.
Till I hear the very ash
sigh down among the flowers of brass
I'll breathe, and long past midnight, your last kiss.

[Valleysboy1978]

That's not a sonnet Mendhak, it's more than 14 lines long which a sonnet ALWAYS has to have. No more, no less.

[wossname]

Here is an example.

Joy

Oh when I held you in my arms that night
and kissed your mouth and held your perfect breast,
I felt pure joy and absolute delight
that I could be so very truly blessed.

For what in life is stronger than the need
to touch with love and to be touched in kind:
to open up ourselves and to concede
the borders of our self, our heart and mind?

Now these poor words are my attempt to show
the feelings that your touch has given me:
the joy in me like one I hope to know:
the joy that I once thought could never be.

And where from here we’ll go I can’t be sure,
but it’s my fondest wish that it endure.

huh huh marty said breast.

[mendhak]

That's not a sonnet Mendhak, it's more than 14 lines long which a sonnet ALWAYS has to have. No more, no less.

Well crucify me, shakespeare!

Just put the last four lines together into two, and it's a sonnet.

[Valleysboy1978]

Now THAT'S more like it!
I'd only expect such grammatical mistakes from the Yanks...or NoteMe

[mendhak]

In my defence, it's been copy-pasted from a web page whose URL is no longer in my memory banks.

[Valleysboy1978]

Ah, probably a US author then

[zaza]

mendhak


Mendhak! The frog we all would wish to know.
His eyes in triplicate; his fingers webbed.
And how this froggie sets our hearts aglow,
But when he doesn't post, our fervour ebbs.

Mendhak! An MVP so very long.
The noobs are pleased with all your blessed code.
Your avatar looks Oh! so very strong.
Your swollen head must be a heavy load.

Mendhak! I wait with baited breath to see
The much-desired return of 3D frog.
Held on so long I really need to wee,
The steam is rising, causing such a fog.

Alas! Alas! No longer can I wait!
I see a thread named "Golden Chair". Tis fate.

[MartinLiss]

mendhak


Mendhak! The frog we all would wish to know.
His eyes in triplicate; his fingers webbed.
And how this froggie sets our hearts aglow,
But when he doesn't post, our fervour ebbs.

Mendhak! An MVP so very long.
The noobs are pleased with all your blessed code.
Your avatar looks Oh! so very strong.
Your swollen head must be a heavy load.

Mendhak! I wait with baited breath to see
The much-desired return of 3D frog.
Held on so long I really need to wee,
The steam is rising, causing such a fog.

Alas! Alas! No longer can I wait!
I see a thread named "Golden Chair". Tis fate.

LOL, very good.

[wossname]

An Ode to




...Sorry I ran out of inspiration at that point.